Internal Conflict: To do it, or not to do it (weed)
Characters: Protagonist/Antagonist. Other character who is
tempting Protag/Antag to do “the thing”
Main character is offered to smoke, but he has personal
conflicts with smoking weed. Then he says “Uh, I have to do something really quick,
can I let you know in a little bit?” He asks to the tempting character.
“Yeah, sure man. Just let me know soon!” Then leaves.
Main character leaves, and enters another room. Suddenly
there is another character who says “Come on, you have to do it! Cut loose
brotha man!”
Main character looks up and sees himself! Surprised he says,
“What the-? NO! I can’t, if I got caught I would be so screwed! My coaches, my
mom, my girlfriend! They would all kill me!”
Evil self, “They would never know, you’ll be fine man. Come
on.”
Good conscious “I said NO. Dude, stop.”
“Don’t be such a wimp.” Evil conscious says as he pushes
good conscious.
“No. And don’t push me, Meanie Head!”
They proceed to get into a fight and then they roll off a
table and one gets up. But it is unknown who it is and he leaves. He goes up to
the character who offered him weed. Smiles and says “No.” And pushes him into a
trashcan. Then he leaves and gets hit by a car due to bad karma from pushing
the kid into a trashcan.
Henry,
ReplyDeleteI can appreciate you wanting to tackle a topic like this since many high school students will face it in their life. I wonder, though, if you can do it more subtly or metaphorically. There are a lot of things in life that can ruin us, get us in trouble, or make us have an internal conflict. Why not pick a metaphorical vehicle that expresses many things rather than one drug?
Also, your ending seems like you wrote it quickly as almost a joke... I don't mind the protagonist getting hit by a car, but how would you SHOW bad karma? Can this be clearer? Or perhaps changed...?